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n the past when students did a university degree,they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays,they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development

University degree
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A university degree
 is very important for any individual for getting a good
job
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.Now the students have more opportunities to do their higher studies abroad than the past.
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 development has both advantages and disadvantages. One of the main
advantage
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advantages
 is that the students get a chance to interact with other students who are from different countries and it helps them to learn about new cultures as well as the students get exposed to new methods of teaching and studying.Studying in a foreign
country
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 enables a student to become self dependent as they have to do everything themselves like cooking
,
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,
finding a
job
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 etc. Most of the
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 students prefer to do
thet
pointing out something
that
the
 post graduation
courses
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course
 in other nations as they provide better
job
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 opportunities and standard of living.
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 development has disadvantages as well. If we are studying
abroad we
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abroad, we
 should look after
ourselves but
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ourselves, but
 if we are studying in our own
country
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 we get support from family and friends and can concentrate well in our academics.Another disadvantage is that many students going abroad for their higher studies make it as their
home land
the country where you were born
homeland
.After the completion of their
studies they
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studies, they
 find a
job
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their
in or at that place
there
 and prefer to settle down in that
country
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 itself and
donot
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do not
 come back to their motherland.
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Also many
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Also, many
 students may find it difficult to adapt to the new culture. Many students find it very difficult to survive in foreign nations due to the high cost of living and expenditure. In general
,
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,
studying in any foreign
country
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 has more advantages than disadvantages.Doing higher studies abroad makes a person more confident
,
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,
self dependent and
also
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 more knowledgeable about different cultures which helps them to adapt to new environment very easily and quickly.

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