Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Traffic
rules are to be followed strictly
otherwise
accidents will happen and precious lives will be lost.
Traffic
accidents can be reduced by applying strict punishments for each violation. When there are strict punishments people avoid violating any
traffic
rules which result in reduced
traffic
accidents.
Its
Suggestion
It's
human nature to not to do
such
things which result in punishment. Though there are people who will still do violations even if the rules are there. Here the punishment should be
revocation driving
Suggestion
revoked, driving
revoked driving
license.
Also there
Accept comma addition
Also, there
should be authorities which should ensure that the
traffic
rules be complied with in any case. There are those who believe that there are other measures that can be taken to reduce
traffic
accidents.
This
can be done by introducing various safety measures, which include, designing of roads and bridges in a safe and secure way, putting up road safety signs, provision of free trainings to people, etc. These measures
also
contribute to the reduction of accidents on the road. Though both the views are correct,
however
, we cannot say that one can replace the other.
Infact both
Accept comma addition
In fact, both
In fact both
compliment
eachother
Suggestion
each other
. Both have equal importance and are necessary for the reduction of
traffic
accidents.
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