Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Traffic

rules are to be followed strictly

otherwise

accidents will happen and precious lives will be lost.

Traffic

accidents can be reduced by applying strict punishments for each violation. When there are strict punishments people avoid violating any

traffic

rules which result in reduced

traffic

accidents.

Its

Suggestion

It's

human nature to not to do

such

things which result in punishment. Though there are people who will still do violations even if the rules are there. Here the punishment should be

revocation driving

Suggestion

revoked, driving

revoked driving

license.

Also there

Accept comma addition

Also, there

should be authorities which should ensure that the

traffic

rules be complied with in any case. There are those who believe that there are other measures that can be taken to reduce

traffic

accidents.

This

can be done by introducing various safety measures, which include, designing of roads and bridges in a safe and secure way, putting up road safety signs, provision of free trainings to people, etc. These measures

also

contribute to the reduction of accidents on the road. Though both the views are correct,

however

, we cannot say that one can replace the other.

Infact both

Accept comma addition

In fact, both

In fact both

compliment

eachother

Suggestion

each other

. Both have equal importance and are necessary for the reduction of

traffic

accidents.

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