Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that high school student now
days
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a days
is wasting more time
in
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on
silly things
such
as social media and
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
games. The
guestion
an instance of questioning
question
that should be asked if high school student will make a
cometment
the trait of sincere and steadfast fixity of purpose
commitment
with
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to
the
cummunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
service?
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am going to say my view in
this
essay and draw my own conclusion. I agree that
commuity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
service by any kind is very good for young people.
for
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To
For
instance collecting charity for other people is going to make them really evaluate and
estame
the condition of being honored (esteemed or respected or well regarded)
esteem
the simplest they had in their life even if it was a meal or
t-shirt
a close-fitting pullover shirt
T-shirt
!
improving
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Improving
the neighbourhood is going to give them nice time with
thier
of them or themselves
their
neighbours and to socialize with them and make connections.
Althogh
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Although
its
it is
it's
good for feeling
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
free times and make them more
usefull
being of use or service
useful
in
thier
of them or themselves
their
parents
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parents'
eyes.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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