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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? Write at least 250 words.

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People move in and they move out
.
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.
Thats
Suggestion
That's
 known as
immigration
 when moving
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 another
country
. It has a profound effect on a nation and society.
Immigration
 has various causes associated with it. The main one is
need
Suggestion
needed
 for happiness and wealth. Most people from developing countries like India, China,
Philiipines etc
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Philippines, etc.
Philiipines etc.
Philippines etc.
Philippines etc
 migrate to developed countries like US, UK, Canada, Australia and NZ. These people lack basic facilities in their countries like roads, clean water, clean air, traffic jams leading to chaos everywhere. They have
talent but
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talent, but
 its lost in
swarmth
Suggestion
the warmth
warmth
s warmth
 of heads. Developing
coutnries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
 are unable to control their population.
Hence
 brighter people will migrate to greener shores bringing their knowledge to develop wealthy nations. In exchange, they got loads of fortune and better working facilities.
However
, one major consequence of
immigration
 is
influx
Suggestion
an influx
the influx
 of cheap labour.
Often talented
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Often, talented
 citizens of native
country
 are replaced by
cheap
Suggestion
cheaper
 immigrants and
this
 causes an uproar amongst citizens.
This
 has
distrubed
having the place or position changed
disturbed
distributed
 demography of
whole
Suggestion
the whole country
country
. Ideally immigrants should adjust and learn
culture
Suggestion
the culture
 of
host
Suggestion
the host country
country
. They should mingle with citizens as friends and should not pose a threat to them.
This
 must be made possible by having conversations with different groups of immigrants and citizens. Having said that,
immigration
 should be controlled in a phased manner and it should be revised often according to the needs of
host
Suggestion
the host country
host countries
country
.
Overall
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Overall, immigration
immigration
 has major benefits to wealthy nations and immigrants
also
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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