When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

Whether the
technology
and its influences kill the traditional
way
of
life
and whether should we try to preserve the tradition is a controversial issue and required an in-depth argument before deciding. In my opinion, the
technology
definitely traditional skills, expertise and
way
of
life
change and the change might be slow for many societies but it is a sure thing. About the
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
later
part of the argument: ‘whether it is pointless to try to preserve those’ is something I opine that that should not be imposed on people. Who want to maintain the traditional
way
of living rather than embracing the
technology
should be given the option. The history suggests us that the new invention and
technology
have greatly changed the
way
people live and mostly these changes help them to choose for better alternatives. People who used to cultivate lands with the plough and cow in many years before and that was a kind of
skill
that became obsolete with the invention of the motorized irrigation system. People might have lost the
skill
they had but the
technology
helped them to produce more crops than ever before. With the invention of cell the phone, the internet, television, refrigerator people
Suggestion
has definitely adopted
have definitely adopted
a different lifestyle than they had many years ago and those changes, in my opinion, are important to ensure a better
life
. We would not blame the medical science for killing the traditional unscientific treatment and would widely accept it. In most of the cases, people used to do things manually and with the widespread of
technology
they have started relying on
technology
than their own
skill
and that has caused the loss of traditional
skill
. But we have to bear in mind that many technologies have been replaced by newer ones and people always try to take the easy and better alternatives. About the importance of conserving the traditional
skill
and
way
of
life
, I would say when
technology
offers us a better alternative, we should cordially accept
Accept comma addition
that, but
that but
we should
also
respect the
Suggestion
people among us who
people who among us
maintain the old
way
of
life
.
Technology
would knowingly and unknowingly influence our
Accept comma addition
life, but
life but
we should not make it a must for everybody.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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