You have a spare room in your Apartment that you would like to rent out to a student. Write a letter to your Student Accommodation Officer of local college and say 1. Where is your apartment located? 2. When will the room be available 3. What are the requirements for a student to stay?

Dear Sir, With due respect, I am writing
this
letter to inform you about the availability of a room in my
apartment
which I intend to rent out to a student.
Firstly
, I own an
apartment
at Homeland Heights block C and my flat number is 112. The
apartment
is located at a prime location with just
5kms
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5 km
away from the airport,
8kms
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8 km
from the shopping complex and
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just 10 minutes walking distance to your college.
Furthermore
, the
apartment
consists of four rooms out of which three are occupied by me and my family and the remaining one is being refurbished. Prior to
this
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it was let out to one of the
student
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from your college who passed out
last
year. The room is almost complete and is ready to move in from 7th
march
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2020.
Lastly
, we want to rent out it to someone
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who is sincere and honest and takes utmost care of the room as all the new bathroom fittings and lights have been installed.
Also
, the student is required to be back by 9 pm , no
late night
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parties or loud music, outsiders will not be permitted. Only in case of emergency will the outsider be allowed. Prior consent from the owner is a must for the same. In case of any
further
clarifications , please feel free to contact on
my
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email i.e [email protected] Regards,

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task response
Please provide clearer details about the requirements for a student to stay in the room, such as rent, deposit, and any specific rules or regulations.
coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a proper greeting and closing. Please begin the letter with a formal salutation and end with a suitable closing phrase, such as 'Yours sincerely' or 'Best regards.'
coherence cohesion
The ideas are present but the organization and connection between sentences could be clearer. Consider using transition words and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • apartment situated in
  • convenient location
  • public transportation
  • amenities
  • available from
  • occupancy
  • non-smoker
  • quiet hours
  • rental price
  • duration of stay
  • necessary documents
  • proximity to
  • college campus
  • prospective tenant
  • fully furnished
  • shared amenities
  • terms and conditions
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