In some countries, increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a results of eating too much fast foods. Therefore, government should force higher taxes in this kind of foods. Do you agree/disagree

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People are always willing to try different foods in their lifetime,

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, they are consuming all sorts of foods. Due to the drastic development of the world, humans

are mostly rely

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mostly rely

on fast foods, which take them to the dark side, so, some people claim that heavy taxes against fast food, but in my point of view I disagree with that statement.

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, I

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believe that making awareness would be useful.

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with, the growing number of people, especially, teenagers and middle ages are suffering from bad health issues due to unhealthy foods. Because those are extremely hazardous, the reason for that mostly, those meals

are only focused

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only focus

on taste not

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on taste, not

for

healthy

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the healthy

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, they add more colourings, unnecessary preservatives, and fats so, it gives

nice flavour

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a nice flavour

on the tongue,

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everyone lures to eat.

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all brings dangerous sickness

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as heart problems, cholesterol and obesity

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, it will deal with our lives too.

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, people are in the USA, people are mostly bothered by obesity and other diseases rather than other countries.

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, introducing new taxes would not solve

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problem, better arrange free campaigns by the government and hospitals will make a big revolution in

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issue.

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, limiting the fast food shops in the city definitely

helps

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will help

to eradicate step by step in the future.

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, in school teachers teach about the effects while consuming

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food would help to slow down

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problem. To sum up, sort out

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problem rather than placing taxes could help to some extent, but not always,

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, political better try to place other measures.

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In some countries, increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a results of eating too much fast foods. Therefore, government should force higher taxes in this kind of foods. Do you agree/disagree

Fully explain your ideas

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