The pie chart below shows where energy is used in a typical Australian household, and the table shows the amount of electricity used according to the number of occupants.

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The chart indicates the proportion of where energy is used in a typical Australian household in seven different usages based on the amount of electricity

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the number of occupants.

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, it can be seen in the pie chart that there was a significant difference between the percentage of heating and cooling 38% and standby power 3% in household energy

usage

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in Australia.

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, the same percentage to each lighting and fridges and freezers. Both are 7%. Now we have three percentages 4%, 16%, and 25% for cooking, other appliances, and water heating.

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, we can see that the table shows the amount of electricity used increases as the number of people in

a typical Australian home roses

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. If we have one person in the house, we'll

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5000-6000 kWh per year.

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, if we have 2 or 3 persons we'll

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6000-8000 and 7500-10000 kWh per year.

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, if we have 6 persons or more, we'll duplicate to 12000-16000 kWh per year. We can sum up the

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by saying that the household energy

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in Australia percentage. Had a lot of ups and downs

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the number of occupants.

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