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The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.
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The line graph compares three types of
travellers
 to New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 between 1997 and 2017 in terms of their average daily expenditure. It is noticeable that spending by these international visitors was at its highest between the years 2000 and 2003.
Overall
,
business
travellers
 spent the most per day,
while
people
 visiting friends or relatives spent the least. In 1997,
business
 visitors to New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 spent an average of almost 260
dollars
 per day,
while
 holidaymakers spent around 190
dollars
 and
people
 visiting friends or relatives spent less than 120
dollars
. Over the following five years, spending by all three types of
travellers
 increased dramatically, to peaks of around 330
dollars
, 270
dollars
 and 220
dollars
.
However
, visitor spending suddenly fell again between 2003 and 2005. From 2005 to 2015, the daily expenditure of
business
travellers
 and tourists fluctuated around
the
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200
dollars
,
whereas
people
 visiting relations or friends spent roughly 60 to 80
dollars
 less per day. By 2017, daily spending had risen to approximately 250
dollars
, 210
dollars
,
140
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dollars
 respectively for vacationers,
business
people
 and those visiting loved ones.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travellers, business, people, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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