he charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The
first
grade
earned the most
prportion
the quotient obtained when the magnitude of a part is divided by the magnitude of the whole
proportion
proportions
of the money through dance
contests activitiy
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contests, activity
contests activity
,
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,
they gained in
eaxact
Suggestion
exactly
exact
23.7%.
whare
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Where
War
Whare
, the
second
grade
came
secondly
by
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in
20.9% through
participting
taking part in an activity
participating
in
cake decorating contest
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the cake decorating contest
a cake decorating contest
. The fifth
grade
earned 18.3%
,
Accept space
,
they took part in
cookie sale activity
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a cookie sale activity
the cookie sale activity
where the sixth
grade
earned 15.5% in soccer skill contest
.
Accept space
.
in
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In
contrat
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
the the
definite article
the
fourth
garde
a body of students who are taught together
grade
garden
God
and the
third
grade
,
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,
they came
in
Suggestion
at
least earning of money by 13.9% and 7.8
% respectively
Accept comma addition
%, respectively
.
it
Suggestion
It
is clear that book sale and art sale were
the least activities
Suggestion
the least active
the least activity
for earning money among all of the activities.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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