he charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The
first
grade
earned the most
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proportion
proportions
prportion
of the money through dance
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contests, activity
contests activity
contests activitiy
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,
,
they gained in
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exactly
exact
eaxact
23.7%.
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Where
War
Whare
whare
, the
second
grade
came
secondly
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in
by
20.9% through
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participating
participting
in
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the cake decorating contest
a cake decorating contest
cake decorating contest
. The fifth
grade
earned 18.3%
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,
,
they took part in
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a cookie sale activity
the cookie sale activity
cookie sale activity
where the sixth
grade
earned 15.5% in soccer skill contest
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.
.
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In
in
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contrast
contrat
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the
the the
fourth
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grade
garden
God
garde
and the
third
grade
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,
,
they came
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at
in
least earning of money by 13.9% and 7.8
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%, respectively
% respectively
.
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It
it
is clear that book sale and art sale were
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the least active
the least activity
the least activities
for earning money among all of the activities.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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