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Your landlord is asking to increase the rent. Write a letter to him. In your letter, you should tell: •why you think the rent shouldn't be increased •what you will do if it is increased

#landlord #rent #•why #shouldn #•what
Dear Mr John I am writing
this
 letter to discuss regarding the increment in the rent. I am very sorry to say that I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 with it. As you know, I received the notice from you
last
 week. It was written
on
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 the letter that
price
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the price
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 of rent will be increased by 10
percent
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per cent
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 from next month.
However
, as per the agreement between us
that
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apply
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rent will be increased
at
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by
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 10 percent on
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an annually
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annually
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 basis on which we both agreed. But you are raising it after 6 months which will not be acceptable. It is requested that please consider my valid reasons regarding
this
 matter.
However
, if you do not agree with it
then
 I would take you to the court under the act of discrimination as it is against the clause of the contract.
Moreover
, I will vacant the
premise
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 and break
this
 tenancy by the end of
this
 month. Looking forward to hearing from you Warm wishes Gurjeet

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve organization and clarity.
task response
Provide more specific and valid reasons to support your position on the rent increase, and clearly state the consequences of the rent increase.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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