Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

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modern society, there

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increasing

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problem

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in our general population. In order to foster public

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, some

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claims

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to increase the

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sport

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facilities

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in different measures. It goes without saying that the best way to improve body

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is taking exercise.

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a plethora of doctors and researchers, they all agree that taking exercise can strengthen our body's immune system and reduce the possibility of getting obesity and

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issues. Take myself as an example, I used to stay at home playing video games all day long, and I got sick easily at that time.

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, since the

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sport

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centre was built near

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my house, I often went there for swimming and jogging. Gradually, I started to maintain the habit of exercising, and my

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problem has disappeared.

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, it is not that easy for

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to use the

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sport

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facilities

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spontaneously.

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would become a waste for the entire society.

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try other measures to improve

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public

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for those fast food restaurants, encouraging

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riding

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bike

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of driving for short

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management classes for

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, it will be too narrow if we only focus on building more

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sport

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facilities

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than other various solutions. We should encourage

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not only

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physically active but

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options at the same time.

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Grammar

Ensure proper grammar and verb tense usage. For instance, '...some people claims...' should be 'some people claim...', '...believing in different measures.' should be '...believe in different measures.'.

Word Usage

Correct errors in word usage such as 'remain' should be 'consider' in '...also remain others options at the same time.'

Coherence and Cohesion

Work on sentence structure and coherence. 'It will be too narrow if we only focus on building more sport facilities than other various solutions.' could be improved to 'Focusing solely on building more sports facilities would be too narrow a strategy, as various other solutions should also be considered.'

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

public health
sports facilities
physical activity
exercise
chronic diseases
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safe environment
social interaction
community engagement
comprehensive approach
health education programs
environmental factors
healthcare infrastructure
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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

Your opinion

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Nowadays, some people choose to have their first child at an older age. Do the advantages of having children at an older age outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some think that these activities are not beneficial for a child’s mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?