Nowadays, some business face problems with the new employees who are just finished their education and may lack interpersonal skills such as the ability to work in a team. What do you think is the main cause of the problem? How can it be solved?

day and age, more and more job opportunities are provided for the postgraduates as the development of the economy.
, the fresh employees who
are just finished
have just finished
are just finishing
just finish
their education that lack the interpersonal skills become the problem of
one or some or every or all without specification
, it is important for us to discuss the causes of
trend and its solution.
of all, when the postgraduates leave their comfort zone and start to work in the competitive workplace, they will feel frightened and nervous because of the new circumstance. They would rather be quiet and do the work alone, nor to communicate with the colleagues.
In addition
, the education system is the crucial point of
Accept space
for the force feeding as a teaching
method is cut
method is to cut
off the ability of showing own thought and merit. Those people do not have the personal opinions because they are used to follow the instructions step by step.
can assign some experienced colleagues to assist the new employees to join in the team.
the employees will be shy and unfamiliar at the
time, they will get familiar with the job content and the colleagues sooner at the accompanying of co-worker. They will be more active to raise the suggestion and cooperate with the teammates and it is
for the development of
. In conclusion,
must play an essential role to pay attention to the employees' working situation as they are the only recourses to pay the effort to enhance
the growth
the business
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