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The new media has a strong negative influence on people's live. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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In the pace with the advancement of technology, it is commonly recognized that the remarkable improvement of human's living standard. Nowadays, we can obtain abundant information easily through the new media and all the researches that are under our
fingertips just
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fingertips, just
 a click away on the screen to receive it effortlessly.
However
, some people think that the new media
such
 as the Internet contributes to a negative effect on people's
live
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lives
.
First
 of all, it is undeniable that new media has brought the convenience
for
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to
 our life as social media make spoken and written communication between people anytime, anywhere. It is different with the past of writing letters, more and more people are online at
time
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the time
a time
times
, messages are often answered almost immediately and it is
costless
 and save the time of mailing.
Although
 people live in various places, new media can provide a platform for them to discuss the local or international issues and connect with anyone to share their thoughts, photographs and life experiences. Apart from that, new media
also has
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also have
 some negative influence, for it
is cut
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cuts
 people off from their immediate surroundings and disrupts face-to-face communication. People who are addicted to the media can't react quickly as their sights are always on the phone and maybe injure due to unawareness. Nowadays, humanity is more concerned about the 'likes' of their posts rather than saying anything truly meaningful, causing they rarely engage in the daily dialogue or even use emoticons to express their feelings. In conclusion, it can be claimed absolutely that new media is the double-edged sword. If we use them properly, we will
obtain the
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obtain, the
 more benefits than the drawbacks.
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