Multicultural societies, where people of different groups live together, bring more benefits than drawbacks to a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In Malaysia, there are three main
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races, including
races including
Malays,
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Chinese
Chineses
and Indians that forming our society. It is different with other nations which are only one race, the number of Malays is almost a half of the total population in Malaysia, followed by that for
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Chinese
Chineses
and Indians.
Therefore
, as a melting pot of culture, multicultural societies have brought the more benefits than shortcomings in our country.
First
of all, people will learn to be tolerant of other people's beliefs is the obvious advantage of the multicultural societies. Every
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belief
beliefs
have its unique creeds that let the believers
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be
to be
kind, so that we must not challenge their limits.
For example
, eating pork is taboo of Islam, we must prepare the halal food for the
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Malaysian
Malay
people,
instead
of forcing them to eat pork which is contrary to their creeds. In the situation of
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multicultural
multiculture
, children will realise that all the people and beliefs are equal, all of us have deserve relative respect and no one becomes special due to their races, beliefs or even the colour of skin.
On the other hand
, cultural diversity means that society will become rich and interesting, because of the cultural exchange and the cultural difference that generate the sparks. We have various
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festivals
festival
that celebrated by many people
such
as Chinese New Year, Hari Raya and Deepavali.
Although
we are from different races, we share the food and drinks as well as live in harmony. All those things will make the world more peaceful and homogeneous. In conclusion, we must cherish the opportunity to be friends with the people of different ethnics or even being their neighbours.
Hence
, we should maintain
this
valuable relationships and avoid any conflict as unity is the strength.

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