The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares five countries namely
France
,
USA
, Spain, China and Italy in terms of the
number
of
tourists
and tourist expenditure in the years 2012 and 2013. In general, the
number
of
tourists
in
France
was highest
while
the highest spending on international tourism was seen in the
USA
during the period shown.
In addition
, both the
number
of
tourists
and the amount of money spent by
tourists
of
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the five nations mentioned increased slightly. In 2012, the
number
of
travelers
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travellers
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in
France
and the
USA
were
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83
million
and 66.7
million
respectively, and after one year, these figures increased slightly to 84.7
million
and 69.8
million
. There was a 3
million
rise in the
number
of Spanish
tourists
while
China saw
an
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decrease in the
number
of
travelers
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travellers
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during the period shown. The
number
of
tourists
in Italy was lowest in 2012 and grew by 1.3
millions
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in 2013. With regard to tourist spending, the
USA
had the highest tourist spending ($126.2
billion
)
while
the lowest expenditure was seen in Italy ($41.2
billion
) in 2012. These figures rose to $139.6
billion
and $43.9
billion
respectively.
In addition
,
France
, China and Italy witnessed an increase in the amount of money spent by their
tourists
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, usa, number, tourists, million, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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