The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.

The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.
The pie chart illustrates the
three
primary factors that contributed to the degradation of
land
all over the world including over-grazing,
deforestation
and
over-cultivation
, and
other
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. The table gives information on how these categories affected
land
in North America,
Europe
, and Oceania in the 1990s.
Overall
, over-grazing
were
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the greatest cause of worldwide less productive
land
. Among the
three
regions,
Europe
had the largest proportion of affected
land
by
three
causes
. The opposite was true for North America. The pie chart shows that over-grazing accounted for the highest
percentage
which is 35% of
causes
of less productive
land
.
However
, there seemed to be small differences between
this
figure
of
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over-grazing and
deforestation
. It appeared that 30% of agricultural
land
were
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destroyed because of
deforestation
.
Moreover
,
over-cultivation
also
had
negative
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effect on worldwide
land
, which had
percentage
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a percentage
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of 28%.
On the other hand
, other factors accounted for 7% of
land
destruction. From the given table,
total
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degraded
land
by the
three
causes
during the 1990s in
Europe
was 23%.
This
percentage
nearly doubled Oceanian (13%) and was more than four times as much as North American (5%). In
Europe
, less productive
land
by
deforestation
represented 9.8%
while
over-cultivated
land
and over-grazed one accounted for 7.7% and 5.5%. Meanwhile, over-grazing took up the greatest proportion
among
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three
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causes
in Oceania, which made up 11.3%.
However
, only 1.7% of Oceanian
land
was destroyed by
deforestation
.
Over-cultivation
seemed to have no effect on
this
region
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land
in the period.
However
, it was the main cause, which accounted for 3.3% of
region
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regions
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whose less productive
land
, among
three
categories in North America
while
1.5% of
this
area's degraded
land
was caused by over-gazing and 0.2% was affected by
deforestation
. In total, the
percentage
of degraded
land
by over-grazing,
deforestation
, and
over-cultivation
in these
three
regions took up 41% that nearly halved the
world
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total
percentage
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, land, deforestation, over-cultivation, europe, causes, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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