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A country becomes more intereting and develops more quickly when ts population includes a mixture of nationalities

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The chart describes about ten countries with the highest spending on
travel
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 in 2014. There are China, United States, Germany, United Kingdom, Singapore, South Korea, Hongkong, India, Malaysia, and Taiwan. As the diagram suggests, China Spent up to 100
Billion
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USD
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. It was the highest for the consumer spending on
travel
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 in 2014. The
second
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 place was United States and Germany, both of them had the same spending with 85
billion
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USD
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. The
third
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 position United Kingdom with spending on
travel
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 grabbed 50-55
billion
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USD
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. The
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 place Singapore held 25
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USD
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. South Korea were equal to Hongkong with 20
Billion
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USD
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. After that India has been just over 15
billion
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, while Malaysia and Taiwan stood at the bottom with around 10-12
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USD
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. Regarding from
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 chart, we can conclude that China was the country with the highest position and Taiwan was the lowest of spending on
travel
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 in 2014.

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