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Some people think that modern design for schools and offices with more open spaces are necessary. Advantage and disadvantage.

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It is considered by many that contemporary designs for educational and work spaces should focus on making these areas more open and spacious. There are
range
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a range
 of advantages to create more open spaces, they
also
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 have some drawbacks that must be noted.
First
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 and foremost benefit of open spaces is that it creates a more natural environment. If we have the large place
room
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room, then
then
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 the air can circulate easily which makes people happy and energetic.
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, schools and offices can save plenty amount of money by large place. They do not have to take party plot or
auditorium on
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auditorium, on
 rent to do extra activities like seminars, meetings and annual function.
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, in my
country 70
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country, 70
% of schools organise their annual function in their own ground.
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, working out in the open area can make it easier to learn new things.
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, open spaces can cause some problems.
First
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 one is
increment
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an increment
 in noise. When a large number of people sharing a classroom or office, the chance of noise generate is higher. If a student is trying to read or an employee is trying to do the
work
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work, then
then
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 they will not be able to concentrate.
Secondly
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, extra money
have
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has
 to be invested
into
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in
 the large space of the rooms. Management
have
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has
 to invest money on material
such
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 as floor tiles,
pain
a substance used as a coating to protect or decorate a surface (especially a mixture of pigment suspended in a liquid); dries to form a hard coating
paint
, lights and so on. To conclude, the concept of open spaces for schools and offices are more successful because they create the positive environment.
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, students and employees do their work more productively.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • hierarchical barriers
  • inclusive
  • space utilization
  • adaptability
  • transparency
  • mobility
  • concentration
  • productivity
  • visual distractions
  • privacy
  • sensitive matters
  • conducive
  • introverts
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