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Some people think that it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use while others argue that it is cruel to do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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When it comes to animal testing, there is a growing debate over whether researchers should conduct research at the expense of
lives
Suggestion
the lives
 of those animals for human benefits. While some people assert that it is ethically wrong and unacceptable, I believe that their sacrifice should be continued in order to create the better and healthier world. There are many animal lovers who assert that they should stop using live creatures for experimentation as they believe it is morally wrong and cruel and people have no right to suffer other organisms for their benefits. Aside from that, there are some alternative ways that can replace those animal subjects in tests.
For example
, there is a computer program, which shows
suitability
Suggestion
the suitability
 of a new drug on
human immune system
Suggestion
the human immune system
, can be used for medical research.
This
 way, animals would no longer suffer from medical experimentations and people would still be able to benefit from the medical advancements.
Nevertheless
, the contribution animals
has made
Suggestion
have made
 to the medical improvement is significant, and as yet there is no
exactly
Suggestion
exact
 alternative method that can provide the same result as animals do in medical research.
Although
 some computer programs are being used to conduct clinical trials,
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 results
often fails
Suggestion
often fail
 when proceeding on the human body.
Moreover
, while people derive benefits from animal experimentations, other wild lives
also
 benefit from the test results as those animals may
also
 suffer from the similar diseases that people experience
such
 as Cancer and Asthma. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against animal tests.
Although
, exploiting those animals’ lives seems cruel, their sacrifice is essential for the long-term survival of human and other
live
Suggestion
living
 organisms.
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