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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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It is often argued that winning games are the key and the only way to bring satisfaction to the players. In my opinion, I completely disagree that games are only enjoyable in a winning situation. On one hand, there are a
lot
 of types of games that only purpose is only to achieve the highest score.
In other words
, it is practically hard to determine a winner for these games.
Although
, sometimes people will play with friends and compare which one had the highest score among each other.
However
, these situations do not happen everyday and people still enjoy playing with themselves.
For example
, Tetris which is popular among many old players and even some youngsters. Tetris is a simple
game
 which only requires each player to gain as many points as possible. Compare each score among players are only optional and without that feature the
game
 is still pretty much fun to play.
Thus
, there are various fun games that are not purposely for winning but only for entertainment.
On the other hand
, even when losing, a competitive
game
 could
also
 bring pleasure. The thrilled and competition brings determination to improve with every
game
. It cannot be denied that some gamers will feel desperate with each loss.
Nevertheless
, the enjoy of games not only come from the satisfaction of winning, but from every interaction made and development gained on every
game
.
For instance
, the most played games in the
last
 decade, DOTA 2, still bring a
lot
 of newbies. Even though the
game
 is over 10 years and have a
lot
 of professionals, the new players still find it enjoyable. That's why the determination of fun in games cannot be measured only by winning. In conclusion, games are an entertainment that could bring joy even if the players could not become the champion because there are a
lot
 factors to get the excitement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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