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Some people say that parents have the most significant influence in a child's development. However, other say that things like television or friends have the must important influence on them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The most significant factor
influencing
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influencing
 baby's development is always debatable. Some people think that it is p
arenting, which
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parenting, which
affects
have an effect upon
affects
 more while others think television and friends affects the changes in
the mi
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the minors
nors.
This
 essay will discuss both sides in detail and provide evidence as to parents h
ave a deeper
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a deeper impact
impact on the kid's growth. There are several ways in which power of the digital media has trai
ned our you
a young person of either sex
youngsters
ngsters in recent times. They learn skills and academic kno
wledge
with rapid movements
quickly
 qui
ckly by
the act of observing; taking a patient look
watching
w
atchin
the visible part of a television transmission
videos
g videos television.
In contrast
, to it,
this
 entertainin
g world inversely influ
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inversely influenced
has inversely influenced
e
nced the adolescent's health and
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the adolescent's health and intensity
intensity to do
physical ac
any specific behavior
activities
activity
tivities are reduced dramatically. The
second
 reason which
de
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on
pends on
this
 expansion are friends who are responsible for nurturing bond of friendship.
However
, the common problem of teasing and rivalry may result in mental blockages and psychological issues. Parenting,
on the other hand
, is the main branch of improvising the overall growth of any toddler to become one successful person in
life
. Indeed, parents are not only responsible for creating the fundamental gro
und for th
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the little ones
little ones
littler ones
e little ones, but they
also
 guide you throughout your
life
 span. Appar
ently, th
a person who cares for persons or property
guardians
gardens
ese guardians will induce negative
pres
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the child
sure on youth only when they become over possessive and extremely stricter.
F
or instance
seemingly without interruption
continually
continuously
, continually forcing your son or daughter to perform better in academics or winning the sport event as a winner each time. In view of the discussions outlined above, it can be recapitulated that all the eleme
nts have it
the quality of being significant
significance
s significance in terms of maturing from toddler
to adult
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
opinions
. In my opinion, parents have the greater
domination
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a child's life
the child's life
in a
child
's
life
 as they are the one who teaches you to be a good friend or person, and
also
 helps to see television.

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