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Some people say History is one of the most important schoool subjects. Othert people think that, in todays world, subjects like Science and technolog are most important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Education has many
brances
a division of some larger or more complex organization
branches
, the main ones are scientific and humanitarian. In
this
 aspect, some people think that the most required
subject
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subjects
is
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are
 History, while others believe that Science and Technology are more important. History as subject helps to develop in student skill as an
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 the information, on the basis of
this
 the learners can find ways to avoid
pronlems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
 in social life. The conflicts that were in
past
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the past
, are still exist.
For example
, in the years of
repression many
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repression, many
 nations as German, Kazaks deported to Kazakhstan
becaus
for the reason that; on account of
because
eof
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 conflicts in altitude between different ethnic groups. If there had not been that situations people would not to learn to respect
values
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the values
 of others. Current time the technology develops very fast, and they
are take
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take
 the big fragment of our daily life.
Technilogies
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Technologies
 that are being used by people make hard works easier than in past, and
notion
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notions
the notion
 about making our life easier contributes
to think
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to thinking
broad
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broadly
.
For example
,
firstly
 was invented cleaning machine that partially
automatic
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automatically
, and
then
afte
happening at a time subsequent to a reference time
after
 20
years inventors
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years, inventors
 found that machine which can stroke. To
summ
a quantity of money
sum
 up, they are equally important, as one learns to people be more tolerant, while the
second
 one helps to us physically.

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