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Some people say watching TV programmes and movies on crimes is more popular. Why is it increasingly becoming popular and what are the effects on society.

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These
days
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day's
day
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crime
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crimes
-based TV
serials
similar things placed in order or happening one after another
series
 and movies are becoming more and more popular among society. People prefer to watch these types of programs over others because of the
suspense
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 factor involved in it.
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 these programs benefit individual as well as society, there are
also
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 some drawbacks to be taken into account. Popularity of
crime
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 related programs is increasing because of some prominent reasons. One of the chief reasons behind it is people's growing interest in becoming aware about the different kinds of crimes happening all over the world. Most of these stories are based on the real-life incidents happened somewhere,
therefore
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 people become interested in knowing more details of
such
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 incidents so that they can protect themselves from similar mis happenings. Another reason
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for
 the popularity is, people's liking for
suspense
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 stories. Many
such
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 movies' stories involve
suspense
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, so people prefer them over comedy films. Growing trend of popularity of
crime
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-based stories have both positive as well as negative effects on society. While few adults get benefited from
such
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 programs as after watching these serials, they take preventive measures to protect themselves from becoming a victim of
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a similar crime
similar crimes
crime
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, but some teenagers often get inspired from
such
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 stories and they may take similar steps to take revenge from someone.
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, in a survey done on criminals, it was found that
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of older children did the
crime
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 after watching a
crime
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 program on TV. In conclusion, while some people watch TV programs to get awareness about surroundings, others watch that because of their interest in
suspense
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 stories.
This
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 trend is advantageous for adults, but it has proven to be disadvantageous for teenagers.

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