Some people become famous at young age. Is it good thing or bad thing?

Being famous is not the privilege of adults nowadays. Some kids at a very young
age
have lived in the spotlight. While the
fame
a contest with rules to determine a winner
game
is bringing wealth and substantial public attention, probably with the accompanying self-satisfaction, to them, these kids are faced with more problems resulted from
this
fame
a contest with rules to determine a winner
game
than what they have gained. Kids at an early
age
are often too young to formulate a stable and mature
worldview
and outlook. A great many flowers and applause from the public may boost their ego, leading to the unrealistic self-awareness. They may easily lose themselves in their life, being proud, wilful and disrespectful to others that are not so famous. Their families and agents may
also
be overprotective of these kids, which aggravates
this
tendency. Sometimes, behavioural problems would occur when they grow older.
For instance
, Justin Bieber became a well-noted star at a mere
age
of 14.
Although
14 is not a very young
age
for a kid, he has paid
price
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the price
a price
of being famous that early. His 12 years as a pop star under the spotlight has witnessed various cases of his misconduct, including addiction to drugs and prostitution, driving
overspeed
and disrespect to other countries.
In addition
, since these kids are not adults, their guardians-usually parents-are granted substantial power, by law, to make decisions for them. In order to gain as much fortune as possible through taking advantage of their children, some parents may violate their child’s right and act against the latter’s will, In China,
for example
, one mother was exposed by the social media that she beat her 5-year-old daughter, who is a famous child model in the country, from time to time, in order to force her modelling
children
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children's
clothing when the kid wanted to have a rest. What’s worse, the poor girl is even not allowed to eat till full as the mother needs the girl to be short enough to fit in the clothes. Unfortunately, kids as little as her could barely fight against their parents. If
media
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the media
doesn’t report their suffering, or the government is unaware of their condition, the abuse of their parents may continue until these children become independent adults.
This
will bring substantial harm to kids, both physically and mentally. In summary, given the
immatureness
and
vulnerability
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the vulnerability
of children
vis
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vi's
is
-à-
vis
by way of
via
vi's
their parents, I suppose there are more disadvantages for kids being famous too early.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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