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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Schooling is a platform that develops a
student
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's personality. Unfortunately, problems created by
aggressive
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the aggressive student behaviour
student
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behaviour
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 are on a rise in several countries.
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 essay analyses the various causes and remedial actions that can be taken to prevent it.
Primary cause
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The primary cause
A primary cause
 of violent
behaviour
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 of students can be attributed to their social background. An individual constantly exposed to violence at
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 will tend to act the same manner at
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.
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,
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 environment plays a vital role in shaping a
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's character. Modern education is based on competition and comparison.
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, schools conduct monthly examinations to assess the
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's progress and due to
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 they are subjected to undue stress that leads to acts of violence being committed at
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.
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 the issue of
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behaviour
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 is a serious one, appropriate measures should be taken to eliminate the problems at the grass-root level. Parents should create a harmonious environment at
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 where a
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 has independence to express his views that can result in a drastic improvement in their
behaviour
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 outside the
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. Schools must revamp their education system to create a non-competitive way of learning which will result in a healthy ecosystem where individual talent is respected. There should be several ways of grading based on individual’s talent and not have a one scale fits all grading
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systems
. In conclusion, social and education system, which are the major contributors to extreme
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 of students can be
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curbed
 by placing right measures at
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 and
school
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. Students are the jewel of our society, and it is our responsibility to guide them in the right direction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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