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Some people believe that now we have too many choices. Others however believe that choices are still limited. Discuss both the views about give your opinion.

In
this
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 contemporary era, the options available to accomplish anything have increased significantly.While some people believe that we have too many choices nowadays, others;
however
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 opine, that choices
are
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is
 still limited.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and will form an opinion in support of
former view
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the former view
. Admittedly, those who opine that options are limited, may argue on
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the basis
 of
nature
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the nature
 of a
person
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.To be specific, a
person
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 might be an introvert who fears of taking
risk
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risks
,
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result he
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result, he
 might not explore some other options and stays with the option he is following.
Secondly
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, education and less knowledge of a
person
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 could be the reason for
this
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 as well.
For instance
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, in
pakistan
a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
Pakistan
, villagers who are mostly introvert and less educated have only bus service available for transport as compared to cities where
lot
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a lot
lots
 of other options are available.
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, I and another school of thought believe that choices are multiple and sometimes it becomes extremely difficult for a
person
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 to choose between them. To elucidate, every commodity nowadays, has so many brands, who try to compete with each other and offer
varieties
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variety
 with minimum prices.
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, the
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of information technology has made it quite easy for
person
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 to explore some better options.
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, the different brands of mobile who are strong competitors can be compared with a few clicks and the best one having minimum price can be selected. To sum up, it is irrefutable that choices are limited for people having introvert nature and limited knowledge.
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, I completely agree, that in present time,
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a plethora
 of options are available because of competition among brands and influence of information technology.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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