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Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

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In the modern era, competition is increasing day by day in all over the world.
Although
, more and more people do
have travel long
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have to travel long
 distance for better employment and spend more time
on
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at
work
. I believe that,
this
 trend has both advantages and disadvantages, it is not possible to speak in favour of one opinion. To embark that, there are many advantages of
this
 phenomenon that, why people spend
long time
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a long time
 on
work
 and they find more jobs in another city.
First
 and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
, they can get more knowledge and techniques about working. When they
interact different types of
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interact with different types of
 people.
Secondly
, they can earn more money whenever, they spend more hours
on
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of
at
work
 and they
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs and demand of their families. People can gain more experience and easily find better
work
 opportunity in other hometown. They will be able to introduce them to big companies in his hometown.
Moreover
, long working hours and
work
 far from own hometown has some drawbacks.
Firstly
, they can face more problem regarding Heath issues and they can take more
strees
the relative prominence of a syllable or musical note (especially with regard to stress or pitch)
stress
 when they live alone.
Secondly
, they cannot spend more time with their family and do more missing,.
Furthermore
, they
can not
can not
cannot
 take more term on physical activities because they have more busy their
work
 and they do task long generation. In conclusion,
this
 trend has more advantages and disadvantages. I believe that, young people have
the more opportunity
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more opportunity
the most opportunity
 to hard
work
 and reach their aim and they can gain more experience and technical techniques.

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