Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

In the modern era, competition is increasing day by day in all over the world.
Although
, more and more people do
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have to travel long
have travel long
distance for better employment and spend more time
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at
on
work
. I believe that,
this
trend has both advantages and disadvantages, it is not possible to speak in favour of one opinion. To embark that, there are many advantages of
this
phenomenon that, why people spend
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a long time
long time
on
work
and they find more jobs in another city.
First
and
ranking above all others
foremost
formost
, they can get more knowledge and techniques about working. When they
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interact with different types of
interact different types of
people.
Secondly
, they can earn more money whenever, they spend more hours
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of
at
on
work
and they
put in effect
fulfil
fulfill
their needs and demand of their families. People can gain more experience and easily find better
work
opportunity in other hometown. They will be able to introduce them to big companies in his hometown.
Moreover
, long working hours and
work
far from own hometown has some drawbacks.
Firstly
, they can face more problem regarding Heath issues and they can take more
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stress
strees
when they live alone.
Secondly
, they cannot spend more time with their family and do more missing,.
Furthermore
, they
can not
cannot
can not
take more term on physical activities because they have more busy their
work
and they do task long generation. In conclusion,
this
trend has more advantages and disadvantages. I believe that, young people have
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more opportunity
the most opportunity
the more opportunity
to hard
work
and reach their aim and they can gain more experience and technical techniques.

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