Some people believe that children should spend all of their fee time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments both sides, and say which side you personally support.

Many people think that youngsters ought to outlay of their spare
with family members;
, there are those suppose
that is
ineffective. On the one hand, it may appear advisable for parents
to act role
to act as role
models and to establish ground rules to children for
manner of acting or controlling yourself
by spending their free
as long as possible with their children.
allows children to absorb conventions and codes of conduct which they can follow themselves and could lead to an absence of problems
as bullying, truancy, and delinquency later on.
, being with family should reduce the risk of children falling victim to crimes
as abduction, or the influence of negative peer pressure.
On the other hand
, in a society where many families have dual-
parents or where one parent role as breadwinner means she /he is away from family, it is inevitable that children cannot spend all of their spare
with the family for long periods. Child-minding and after-school childcare are often used in these cases. Thereby, if
it is
managed properly, these can be perfectly viable alternatives for some parents. Equally, it seems that children could learn a considerable amount from peers, and allowing them to play without direct supervision may be a benefit. In conclusion, I am firmly convinced that while family
is essential for bonding and absorbing patterns of behaviour there are definite advantages when children outside of the family too.
is provided that they are in a safe and well-behaved environment with peers who are themselves reasonable brought-up.
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