The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009. Summarise it.

The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public in the US in 2009. Summarise it.
The bar
chart
and pie
chart
give
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information about why US residents travelled and what
travle
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travel
problems they experienced in the year 2009.
It is clear that
the principal reason why Americans travelled in 2009 was to commute to and from work. In the same year, the primary problem of Americans, with regard to the
trips
they made, was the cost of travelling. Looking more closely at the bar
chart
, we can see that 49% of the
trips
made by Americans in 2009 were for the purpose of commuting.
By contrast
, only 6% of
trips
were for visits to friends or relatives, and one in ten
trips
were for social or
recreation
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reasons. Shopping accounted for 16% of all
travels
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travel
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,
while
personal reasons accounted for the remaining 19%.
According to
the pie
chart
,
price
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the price
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was the key consideration (faktör) for 36% of American travellers. Almost one in five people cited safety as their foremost (önde gelen) travel concern,
while
aggresive
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aggressive
driving and highway congestion were the main issues for 17% and 14% of the travelling public.
Finally
, a total of 20% of those surveyed thought that access to public transport or space for pedestrians
were
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the most important travel
issues
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issue
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, trips with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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