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The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows how the Australian Bureau of Meteorology collects up-to-the minute information on the weather in order to produce reliable forecast. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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Australian
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the Australian
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 Bureau of Meteorology
for
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to
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give
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giving
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information
 about the weather are four: incoming
infomation
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information
, analysis and
forescasting
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forecasting
,
reparing
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repairing
 the
broadcast
 and
broadcast
. In the first stage
what
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 is incoming
information
, there are
satelite
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satellite
satellites
Satelite
, radar and drifting
buoy
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,
who
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which
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 collect
datas
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data
 about the weather, and in the
second
 part will
be study
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be studied
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 in the stage called “analysis and
forescasting
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forecasting
”. After that they have the
information
,
they
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and they
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preparing
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prepare
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 the
broadcast
for
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 select the data who will be in their homes.
Finally
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this
information
the
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apply
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people could watch
in
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the
broadcast
througth
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through
 television, radio, or telephone.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, broadcast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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