Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

In the world we can find a lot of differences between poor and rich countries,
this
make me think the life is not fair, so I would like that the developer nations would aim
to
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for
poor people, for doing the Earth plant more equality. Certainly
wealth
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wealthier
wealthiest
wealthy
countries in general have their basics needles cover, while the poor countries many times don’t know if they will have food, health,
education
, needles that even is in the right humans. For
this
reason
,
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,
would be interesting to support poor countries, because
this
can enhance the World.
For
example if
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example, if
improve their
education
this
nations
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nation
could be better persons, due to the
education
is the base of everything. The way of help to poor people is giving knowledge,
this
should be the inversion, because I don’t see like an
aport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
sport
apt
give
materials
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material
things, due to
this
aim is not permanent.
On the other
hand I
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hand, I
would love to Governments of Poor country look after of their citizens, but in the reality we know that
this
does not happen, because in general their leaders only looking for their own welfare, and don’t worry about the real problems.
Desiguality
never will finish, but help with
education
could be short the distances.
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