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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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Chorleywood is a village
of
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in
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 London to have increased their population in the
last
 200 hundred years.
This
it
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is possible to see because the map below shows two important topics, for one side
to teach
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teaches
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 to
construction
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the construction
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 of the new roads, and
on the other
hand
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,hand
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 is
graphic
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a graphic
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the
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of the
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 size of the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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in
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apply
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everry
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every
 couple of years.
According to
 the image from 1868 until 1883 a small space of the land was busy.
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 to
the
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1883-1922, the village
grrow
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grow
grew
up
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by
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aproximately
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approximately
 50%
that
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than
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 the
last
 years.
After in
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the
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1922-1976, the
construction
 continued
in
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to
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 increase, but the most important development was from 1970 until 1994.
In
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 the topic
about
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of
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construction
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the construction
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 of roads,
in
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apply
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the map describe three important
event
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events
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. In
first
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the first
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 place is the main road,
who
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which
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 is two
principle
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principal
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avenue
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avenues
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.
In
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Second
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second
, Motorail was built in 1970, and
last
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the last
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construction
 was
railway
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the railway
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 in 1989.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words construction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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