Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say this information is relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The
job
market is very competitive sector in present day society,
hence
employers have to consider lots of factors when they select employees to their organization. Some organizations conduct very strict interview for their selection. They said that they considered experiences than qualifications. When they make their
job
description and
job
application they will include some personal questions like hobbies, marriage status and interest. That criteria help employers to get an idea about new member they are going to select. My opinion is, personal information
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needed
need
to our workplace. Employers should have an idea about their employees. They can compare status and characteristics of new member with their working
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conditions
condition
and organizational goal
furthermore
, employers can select the best employee who
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has
have
close adaptation
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to
with
their organizational environment. Instance for, "Star garments" at Katunayake is conducted series of interviews when they select their new members. They include different type of activities that can extract personal characteristics and interest of their candidates. Human resource manager of The Star garments said that they want skilled, knowledgeable and specially adaptable employees
moreover
, he said that they want to minimize their
job
turnover as well as improve their productivity. He said that personal details clearly indicate all of the above factors. Sometimes emergency situations can be generated at our work place
such
as accident, perhaps in that condition
this
type of details may be important. Some people disagree with
this
because they do not like express their personal information. I don't have idea about
this
type of people. I think it
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depends
depend
on their
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perception, however
perception
however
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differently, they
differently they
definetly they
put into big
a source of difficulty
trouble
troubles
truble
during find
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good jobs
a good job
good
job
in
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present day
presentday
.
Finally
, I would like to say, personal
a message received and understood
information
informations
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is
are
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a helpful employer
helpful employer
to select the best one.

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