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A lot of old people are suffering from lonliness these days. They also lack physical fitness. What do you think are the reasons for this problem. Can you think of some possible solutions.

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Nowadays a number of
old
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older
 people
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are experiencing
 anxiety and prefer living in solitude rather than expressing their fears.
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, they keep away from crowded areas, seldom stepping out for any physical
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activities, thus
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 spending a majority of their
time
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 indoors. Two of the
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major
 reasons could be
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addicted
 to social media and age related problems. Two of the possible solutions are to disconnect from the virtual world and spend some
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 in the real world along with indulging in some light physical activities. These days people spend most of their
time
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 surfing social media sites and crave validation along with trying to compare their lives with others. If they are lacking certain beauty standard or skills that are portrayed online many go into depression and isolate themselves from the world
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 resulting in loneliness. Recently, the trend of body size zero is gaining popularity all over the internet and those aiming to achieve it resort to unhealthy methods
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 as harmful dieting or extreme exercise routine. People failing to keep up with these trends consider themselves to be failures and sometimes even contemplate suicide as they are unable to keep up with the pressure. An important solution is to restrict the
time
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 spent online and meet and interact with more people around.
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Time limit
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The time limit
 should to be set for accessing social media and
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outdoor
 activities should be given paramount importance. According to a recent
study many people
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study, many people
 felt less depressed and revitalized when they went for a jog or run as the fresh air and boost in blood flow increased their energy.
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, participating in outdoor activities helps you meet new people and enables you to share ideas and strategies for the well being of the team. To conclude, the realms of your life is in your hand and no one can change your life but you! It is never too late to bring about a change in lifestyle and with the right amount of dedication and persistence anything is possible.

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