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In many countries nowadays, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the housework task equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Men and women have too much tension about for a job. It is generally believed that, when men and women arrive office
to
Suggestion
at
home
, they ought to do
home
 chores fairly. Critics:
nonetheless
, in my opinion men and women should do
home
 clean together, and I agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay I will discuss my personal view.
In addition
, whenever men and women comes
home
 from the
work
, they both have tired so only men or women cannot do all the exercise.
however
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However
, they are ought to share their
work
,
such
 as kitchen, floor, dusting and many other things.
For instance
, my uncle and aunt comes to their job they love to do
home
 chores together, whereas it seems that when husband and wife share their
work
 they gain their love and there is no mental issues comes, they could not fight each other
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, majority of couples fight for
homework
 task. Sometime men say he would not do
home
 chores, even as they fight each other. It could possible divorce issue come out. An illustration recently I saw a one case in my street husband gave divorce his wife just cause is she did not do
homework
,
however
home
 chores is very important to share together men and women After that, if the man and women want to live together, they would have to
work
 together. If the woman does not do any type of job, she should have done all
homework
 before, when man comes. If the man does not do any jobs he could
also
 do all the
homework
.
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