The charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employer. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employer. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts show the main reasons for
study
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among students of different
age
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group
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groups
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from under 26 to over 49 years and the support they have received from
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an employee
the employee
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employee
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employees
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with
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in
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same
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the same
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age
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groups.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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there is a gradual decline in
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the study
a study
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study
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studying
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for
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career
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a career
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as a purpose
while
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study
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studying
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for interest consistently goes up.
First
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graph indicates the majority of
the
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apply
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people
study
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for
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career
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a career
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in
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at
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their
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an
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early
age
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although
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it decreases as
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age
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the age
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group
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increases. It is consistently going down till
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age
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the age
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group
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of 40-49 where the number of people who
study
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for
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career
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a career
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and interest both
are
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is
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same (40%) which is exactly half amount of under 26
age
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group
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. Considering
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the over
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over 49
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over-49
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age
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group
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, there is a drastic difference of 50% between reasons for
career
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and interest.
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Second
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The second
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graph shows
the
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apply
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employer support by providing time off and
help
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helps
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with fees,
by
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to
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5 different
age
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groups. As per, observation
it is clear that
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the majority of support (almost 70 %)
are
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is
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provided by
young
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a young
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generation which gradually decreases and becomes half of
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age
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the age
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group
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of 30-39
then
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it again goes up and
reach
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reaches
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above 40%
at
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in
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age
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the age
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group
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of 49.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, group, career with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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