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The charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employer. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employer. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #study #students #age #groups #amount #support #employer #information #features #comparisons
The charts show the main reasons for
study
 among students of different
age
group
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groups
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 from under 26 to over 49 years and the support they have received from
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an employee
the employee
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employee
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employees
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with
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in
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same
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the same
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age
 groups.
Overall
, it can be seen that
,
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apply
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 there is a gradual decline in
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the study
a study
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study
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studying
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 for
career
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a career
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 as a purpose
while
study
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studying
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 for interest consistently goes up.
First
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The first
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 graph indicates the majority of
the
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apply
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people
study
 for
career
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a career
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in
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at
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their
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an
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 early
age
although
 it decreases as
age
Correct article usage
the age
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group
 increases. It is consistently going down till
age
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the age
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group
 of 40-49 where the number of people who
study
 for
career
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a career
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 and interest both
are
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is
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 same (40%) which is exactly half amount of under 26
age
group
. Considering
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the over
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over 49
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over-49
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age
group
, there is a drastic difference of 50% between reasons for
career
 and interest.
Second
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The second
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 graph shows
the
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apply
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employer support by providing time off and
help
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helps
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 with fees,
by
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to
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 5 different
age
 groups. As per, observation
it is clear that
 the majority of support (almost 70 %)
are
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is
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 provided by
young
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a young
the young
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 generation which gradually decreases and becomes half of
age
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the age
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group
 of 30-39
then
 it again goes up and
reach
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reaches
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 above 40%
at
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in
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age
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the age
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group
 of 49.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 87%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words study, age, group, career with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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