We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages, the problems in terms of control and security of information outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?
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although
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internet
for local Use synonyms
communities
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communities, however
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information
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of
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internet
makes life easier for individual people as well as society and local Suggestion
the internet
communities but
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communities, but
damaging effect
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a damaging effect
damaging effects
to
security of people and internal control of companies.
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of
information
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abroad whereas
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abroad, whereas
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a chance
the chance
internet
people Use synonyms
also
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housewives
business
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by
home using social media groups.
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from
On the other hand
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ideas, but
information
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any one
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anyone
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Pizza Hut recipe
was very Suggestion
the Pizza Hut recipe
a Pizza Hut recipe
unique but
one of the employees disclosed that recipe, now we can find cheap and tasty pizza from anywhere other than Pizza Hut.
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