Most schools offer some type of physical education program to their students. Why physical education important? Should physical education classes be required or optional?

In
contemporary era
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the contemporary era
, athletics meets are being organized by
number
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a number
the number
of
institutions in
Accept comma addition
institutions, in
order to stimulate public towards
health
awareness.
Education
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Educating
students about mental and physical
health
is crucial because of some reasons. Training about
health
ought to be mandatory. I will discuss my view in
subsequent paragraph
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subsequent paragraphs
a subsequent paragraph
the subsequent paragraph
. There are some factors the idea that how physical
education
is necessary. Perhaps and significant reason is that eating habits. These days, people are more vulnerable to junk food
such
as immensely oily and spicy they render much preference to task rather than nutrition values that's why, they have to assimilate value of physical fitness which is possible by vocational
education
another reason is that the majority of people
victim
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victims
of eyesight in extreme early age
a long
with a forward motion
along
with they would tackle obesity disorder. Eventually, some learner
have
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has
right schedule by virtue of academic purpose. They do not have time for recreation. So, if vocational
education
becomes part of
academic career
Suggestion
the academic career
an academic career
. They will never feel monotonous.
However
, training about Heath ought to be compulsory. The prominent factor is that,
health
is
vital part
Suggestion
a vital part
of our life. They can
neighter
after a negative statement used to indicate that the next statement is similarly negative
neither
compromise with
health
issues owing to, they have to take an insight about importance physical
education
, if they have knowledge about healthy food. They would be able opt food easily in
this
senssly
in a sultry and sensual manner
sensually
vocational
education
is
worth while
sufficiently valuable to justify the investment of time or interest
worthwhile
for pupils.
Besides
, if physical
education
is set up as optional. They would
deprived
Suggestion
deprive
of the significance of physical activity. They can suffer multifarious ailments. To
warp
arrange or fold as a cover or protection
wrap
up,
although
pupils have
tight schedule
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a tight schedule
because of academic study. But vocational
education
is
also
necessary in order to stay healthy and in order to stay healthy and to improve their habit which creates
determinatal
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
fact on whole life.

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