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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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It is certainly true that in today’s
world people
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world, people
 fritter away plenty of
food
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 purchased by them from retail outlets and restaurants. According to me,
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 is largely due to lack of awareness and the tendency of people to taste everything with the easy availability of a wide variety of foods.
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,
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 could be avoided by education and laws.
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, owing to advancements in
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 technology, both quality and quantity of crops as well as ready to eat foods, have improved, which in turn has decreased prices.
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 enables people to buy excessive amounts of
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 without a real need.
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, absence of strict regulations pertaining to
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 wastage exacerbates the problem. We notice that in large events where
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 is served, when no appropriate legal action is taken, a colossal amount of leftovers
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is thrown
 away.
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, raising awareness of the detrimental effects of
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 wastage ought to be imparted to the populace, using all
sort
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sorts
 of media, including social platforms which would help to draw public attention to the potential dangers of
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 wastage along with remedies to confront it. Apart from
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, enforcing strict laws that prohibit the wasting of
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 by people and companies will deter
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 a harmful practice. The excess
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 must be sent to the needy without any time lag. To conclude, I opine that the decreased prices of
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 as well as lack of regulations allow people to squander huge quantities of
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 purchased from various shops and
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 places,
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at
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 age.
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, creating awareness coupled with strict legislation can curb
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 menace of wasting
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.
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