The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise it.

The graph below shows changes in global food and oil prices between 2000 and 2011. Summarise it.
The line graph compares the average
price
of a
barrel
of
oil
with the
food
price
index
over a period of 11 years.
It is clear that
average global
prices
of
both
oil
and
food
rose considerably between 2000 and 2011.
Furthermore
, the trends for
both
commodities were very similar, and so a strong correlation (93.6%) is indicated. In the year 2000, the average global
oil
price
was close to 25
dollars
per
barrel
, and the
food
price
index
stood at just under 90
points
. Over the following four
years
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years,
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both
prices
remained relatively stable, before rising steadily (sürekli) between 2004 and 2007. By 2007, the average
oil
price
had almost doubled, to nearly 60
dollars
per
barrel
and
food
prices
had risen by around 50
points
. A dramatic increase in
both
commodity
prices
was seen from 2007 to 2008, with
oil
prices
reaching a peak of approximately 130
dollars
per
barrel
and the
food
price
index
rising to 220
points
.
However
, by the beginning of
2009
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2009,
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the
price
of
oil
had dropped by roughly 90
dollars
, and the
food
price
index
was down by about 80
points
.
Finally
, in 2011, the average
oil
price
rose once again, to nearly 100
dollars
per
barrel
,
while
the
food
price
index
reached its peak, at almost 240
points
.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, barrel, oil, food, index, prices, both, dollars, points with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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