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The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world’s oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts
shows
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 the
oil
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resources
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 held,
together with
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 the proportions consumed within the same area each year, in different areas of the
world
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. It is obvious that the region holding the most
oil
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resources
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 is the Middle East, with 56.52%, over
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half of
total
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the total
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world
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oil
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resources
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while
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 in the United States and Asia, the level of
oil
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 consumed each year is
for
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more away from the
oil
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resources
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 they hold. The percentage of total
world
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oil
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 consumption of
United
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the United
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 States and Asia
are
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 25.48% and 26.21% respectively. They are the highest
oil
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 consumption region in the
world
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. Another place
that is
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 worth
mentioned
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mentioning
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 will be
the
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Western Europe. With about twenty
percent
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 of total
world
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oil
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 consumption,
the
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Western Europe merely holds less than 1.5% of the
oil
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resources
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 in the
World
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. Regions that are not mentioned above have the close percentage between
oil
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 holding and
consuming
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consumption
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whereas
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 Canada has the highest level of
oil
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 holding than consuming, the respective figures are 14.84% and 2.48%.
Overall
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, the charts suggest that
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is the only majority at
oil
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resources
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 held,
while
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 Asia,
United
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the United
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 States and western have the highest level
at
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of
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oil
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resources
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 imported.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, resources, world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportions" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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