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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities have to make it easier, especially for such groups, to get into them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays the
education
 system is expanding all over the world. Even though some villagers and poor families finding hard in getting the
university
 studies.
This
 should be resolved as to make it available for the
unaccessed
 people. The families who
are living
Suggestion
live
 in the developed cities are getting the
university
education
 as they are well aware of it. The information and news about the studies will be circulated in the newsletters and advertisers will show the ads in the television, But as far as the rural areas are concerned there won’t be any
such
 platform to get the information of these educational programs. As the world is digitalising the
university
 board members have to plan in
such
 a manner that it reaches the rural places through messages and brochures, so that they can have a chance of getting
university
 studies by
this
 small
upgradation
 in reaching out. The
education
 is for
all irrespective
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all, irrespective
 of rich or poor. It is the basic fundamentals to the student to grow
.
Accept space
.
 Universities should encourage the poor students who are willing to work hard by giving scholarships. In my opinion, I totally agree that everyone should get the
university
studies
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studies, then
then
 it shows that all are equal before
education
 system.

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