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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.

#world #communities #countries
As it is seen nowadays that people are losing their planet in that contest in people think that help everyone in
this
 world is not an easy task does in that case we have to do that thing which is possible and
that is
 the helping our own Nation and communities from my point of view I disagree to
this
 to a large extent for some reasons my position will be cleared for the rain upcoming paragraphs. These days we have various ways to help each other, for that I want to mention the most powerful tool of
this
 error which is the internet. Through internet we can reach on those places where we can't so for the people who are far away from other countries and desperately need help we can make a donation for them through
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. As the previous year there was a flood in Chennai, in that circumstances large numbers of people made donation for them and it helps a lot to them.
next thing
Suggestion
The next thing
Next thing
A next thing
Next things
 which I want to mention here is pecan from an organisation which can help those need help exam a good example for
this
 is Khalsa organisation who helps of letter of people around the world now by providing them food shelter and much more essential things that they need in numerous nations.
as
Suggestion
As
 a result of
this
 many people had joined their organisation.
Moreover
, they set an example for everyone in
this
 world that humanity still exists in humans.
however
Suggestion
However
, I would not overlook the other side to as many of the people does not have much. In that case, they can help those individuals in their district or nation in the can help.
for
Suggestion
For
 instance, if someone wants a job there in that case he can arrange some work for him. At
last
 I want to conclude only the human behaviour makes us different from other living beings so we must have to help those who need our help other in
this
 country or far away from that country those who can.

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