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Many people believe that having a fix punishment for all crime is more efficient. What are the advantage and disadvantages of having a fix punishment?

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Yes, I
also
 think that fix suffering is more efficient than not because all the people will be aware about the discipline
for
Suggestion
of
 the particular case. I
also
 think that there will be hard discipline for any of the
crime
Suggestion
crimes
. If criminal will be aware about the
punishment
,
then
 there will be less
crime
 in the country. If any person will know that the
punishment
 for the rape case is death
punishment
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punishment, then
then
 the rapist must think before doing rape. By fixing
punishment
 for every
crime
 there will be advantages and disadvantages
also
. Some of the advantages are mentioned below. All the people will be aware about the
punishment
 of the particular
crime
 and there will be no time wastage in the courts that what type of
punishment
 will be given to the criminal. Everyone will be afraid of hearing
punishment
. Crimes will
also
 be less. Whether some of the disadvantages will
also
 be there of having fix
punishment
. If
punishment
 will not be hard,
thenthen
Suggestion
then then
 people will make same mistakes in the future that no problem little amount of fine is there we will pay. People will start judging the criminals itself as they will be aware about the
punishment
.

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