The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that
number
Suggestion
a number
the number
of criminal activities of youths had grown significantly,
thus
to settle
this
issue, best parenting skills had to be taught
accrodingly
(sentence connectors) because of the reason given
accordingly
.
This
essay will disagree that parents should not be given
advise
a proposal for an appropriate course of action
advice
.
Firstly
,
this
essay will discuss the fact that government should increase employment opportunities and
secondly
will discuss
increasing number
Suggestion
the increasing number
of
prison
period for young people. Increasing more not opportunities has proven to be successful at curbing the crime issues caused by young adolescents. Government has to provide numerous
jod
direct the course; determine the direction of travelling
guide
good
to the youths that are struggling to survive. From my observation, youngsters engage in criminal activities like robbing a store to feed themselves or their family.
Although
it is
parents
Suggestion
parents'
parent's
responsibility to discipline, young people will still commit
such
crime again to feed their hungry family.
Therefore
, the best method to reduce crime is to create jobs for
unfornate
not favored by fortune; marked or accompanied by or resulting in ill fortune
unfortunate
youngsters. Another approach is to increase juvenile periods for adolescents by
discipling
a branch of knowledge
discipline
and encouraging them when they served their time in the
prison
.
In other words
, staying in the
prison
for
longer period
Suggestion
a longer period
longer periods
of time would help them change from their bad behaviours and would
posibly
by chance
possibly
prevent them to be involved in
such
crimes again.
For instance
, in the UK the juvenile justice system had proven to be
best centre
Suggestion
the best centre
for youths to make changes from involving in crimes. They tend to find jobs and start all over again by
practing
a customary way of operation or behavior
practicing
protecting
what has been taught in the cell. In
conclusion it
Accept comma addition
conclusion, it
can be clearly seen that the growth of crimes created by youngsters can be cut down; by creating work opportunities and increasing child
prison
periods by disciplining and encouraging them.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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