In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the cause of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Job
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market is very competitive sector in present day
society
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society, hence
hence
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employers have to consider lots of factors when they select employees to their organization. Some organizations conduct very strict interview for their selection. They said that they considered experiences than
qulifications
an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something
qualifications
qualification
. When they make their
job
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description and
job
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application they will include some personal questions like hobbies, marriage status and interest. That criteria help employers to get an idea about new member they are going to select. My opinion is, personal information
need
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needed
to our workplace. Employers should have an idea about their employees. They can compare status and characteristics of new member with their working
condition
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conditions
and organizational goal
furthermore
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, employers can select the best employee who
have
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has
close adaptation
with
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to
their
organization
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organizational
environment. Instance for, "Star garments" at Katunayake is conducted series of interview when they select their new members. They include different type activities that can extract personal characteristics and interest of their
candidats
a politician who is running for public office
candidates
candidate
. Human resource manager of The Star garments said that they want skilled,
Knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
and specially adaptable employees
moreover
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, he said that they want to minimize their
job
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turn over
the ratio of the number of workers that had to be replaced in a given time period to the average number of workers
turnover
as well as improve their productivity. He said that personal details clearly indicate all of
above factors
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the above factors
. Sometimes emergency situations can be generated at our work
palce
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
piece
such
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as
accident perhaps
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accident, perhaps
in that condition
this
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type of details may be important. Some people disagree with
this
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because they do not like express their personal information. I don't have idea about
this
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type of people. I think it
depend
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depends
on their
perception
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perception, however
however
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definitely they put into big
truble
a source of difficulty
trouble
troubles
during find
good
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good jobs
a good job
job
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in present-day.
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, I would like to say, personal
informations
a message received and understood
information
are
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is
helpful employer
Suggestion
a helpful employer
to select the best one.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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