Some people think that some type of criminals should not go to prison, instead they should do unpaid work in the community. To what extent do you agree?

Variety of crimes are being punished by
prison
,
however
some people believe that certain offenders
should
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Should
not be imprisoned
,
Accept space
,
rather they should do community services. I agree that in some cases,
prison
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Prison
may not be the best solution and community
work
will help them to rehabilitate. The
first
thing to consider is the young offenders, which are being involved in all
type
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types
of crimes, can
never
not ever; at no time in the past or future
Never
be put into the
prison
.
This
is because the
children’s
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child’s
mind can be moulded easily, so before
giving
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Giving
them harsh punishment the whole matter should be looked for.
For instance
, several
mobsters
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Mobsters
force needy kids to do illegal acts for the sake of money, which make them delinquent
juveniles
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Juveniles
. The rest of the life of the youngsters can be saved by teaching them good deeds along
with
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With
the community works so that they can understand the value of their life. The
second
thing to be considered is that the
drug
addicted persons, who are culprit can never be
imprisoned
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Imprisoned
. The reason is that they commit crimes to feed their destructive addiction, so they need
a
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A
rehabilitation centre,
besides of giving
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besides giving
them a pitiless punishment in a
prison
.
For example
, if a
drug addicted person
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A drug addicted person
Drug addicted person
involves
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is involved
in a social
work
Accept comma addition
work, then
then
it would be possible for him to overcome the
drug
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Drug
craving. Several
drug
addict persons can be able to do the
work
for the welfare of their
societies
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
Societies
and it would definitely
helps
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help
in the growth of communities. In conclusion, putting criminals in a
prison
is not the only way to rehabilitate the criminals. There
should
Suggestion
Should
be a proper investigation of an offender and a crime
.
Accept space
.
I stron
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Offender
Offended
Offence
Offende
gly believe that social
work
without any pay is one of the best way to deterrent them which benefits both society and the offende

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