Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the cause of this and what are some solutions.

Nowadays, there are
number
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a number
of diseases,
such
as loneliness and cardiac diseases, increasing due to less
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
and less connection with
relatives which was
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relatives, which was
not the case in earlier people's life according to several experts.
This
essay will describe perspective reasons and possible solutions of it.
To begin
with the causes of why people are more falling into health problems
thesedays
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these days
, one of the crucial reasons is increasing
rate
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the rate
of professional jobs.
For example
, many people involved in the white
color
a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over
collar
jobs which demand less physical movement
at
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in
the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
with long
hours
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hour
shift while in the past, people were mostly involved in the farming
work
which was demanding huge
engery
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
to
work
in
different type
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a different type
of weathers. Another possible reason is high competition in the current job market. People who are working for companies need to keep update
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
with the
lattest
up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
latest
technology and market demand to keep secure their job role.
Therefore
, spending
long
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longer
time
on learning new things and less
time
with relatives make them feel lonely sometimes.
However
, there are several solutions to overcome from these situations. One of them is setting up home gymnasium.
Although
people do not get enough
time
to travel to
nearnest
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near nest
n earnest
gym, they can save their travel hours and can spend it
in
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on
doing
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
at home.
This
way, they can make
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
stronger to avoid the
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
issues. Regarding spending
time
with friends and relatives, people can avoid the weekend sleep and can plan short or long trip
on
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for
the holidays with relatives. The result of
this
, it kept involving them
into
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in
planning and sharing detail with their loved ones and will feel less alone. In conclusion, whereas health issues and loneliness are increasing in the current generation people because of
competiton
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
competitive
competitors
in the job market and the
work
method that they are involved in, it can be solved by
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
at own pace in their own home and doing trips with relative
whenver
at whatever time
whenever
they get the
time
.

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