Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the cause of this and what are some solutions.
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excercise
and less connection with the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
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essay will describe perspective reasons and possible solutions of it.
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rate
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time
with relatives make them feel lonely sometimes.
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However
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on
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