The map below shows the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

These maps depict the infrastructure improvement that allows easier entry to the city hospital in 2010 as compared to 2007.
To begin
with, it is clear that the main layout of the hospital approach was unchanged.
, on the south there was a city lane.
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Further, this
route, on the right side there was a hospital way.
, the car parking for staff and the public was the opposite direction of the bus stops, which was the both ways of the hospital street.
, city hospital was in the centre of ring highway.
On the other hand
, by 2010, the originally shared car park only allowed staff to plaza cars there, while a public car place was established to the east of the hospital and
is the new constructed area.
, now there are two roundabouts was built which is linked to the ring line and town highway. Not only bus station, but
staff parking has reconstructed. Overall, the construction of new era is more beneficial for the public rather
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previous one.

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